Slain Man

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Jeffrum Thompson
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Slain Man

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Slain Man

Scurrying around for nothing,
Lost in a world of pollution.
An overwhelming sense of longing,
Is there no solution?

Narcissistic world of many,
Malice towards our institution.
An inescapable trap for any,
Never giving resolution.
Legalize It
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This is clever, I really like it. Good job!
NellDikson
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Why did the poet use "he" instead of "I" in the title?
Why did the poet switch pronouns throughout the poem: "We" in stanza 1 and "you" in stanza 5
eric52
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Post by eric52 »

tight rhyme
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